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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given graph illustrates the percentage of average monthly rises or falls in how much copper,
nickel
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 and
zinc
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 cost throughout 2014. The initial impression is that
while
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 the
change
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 in the
price
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 of
nickel
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 and copper experienced a decreasing trend, there was an increasing trend in the
change
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 of
price
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 of
zinc
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 in the given period of time. In terms of
nickel
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 and
zinc
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,as can be seen,
while
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nickel
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change
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 in
price
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 was 6%, which was the highest figure in the whole period, at the beginning of 2014, the
change
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 in the
price
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 of
zinc
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 was 1%, which was the lowest. From January to
March
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, the percentage of
change
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 in the
price
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 of
nickel
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 fell sharply by 5%.
In contrast
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,
zinc
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 experienced a significant increase until February and a small fall to
March
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. Between
March
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 to November,
nickel
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 and
zinc
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 witnessed a similar pattern and there was a dip of - 3% and -1% in
nickel
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 and
zinc
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 respectively, which was followed by a growth in the
price
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 of both metals.From July to September,
nickel
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 and
zinc
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 remained at the same level of 3% and 1% respectively.
At the end
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 of the year,
although
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zinc
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 was responsible for the highest percentage of
change
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, which was 2%, the
change
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 in the
price
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 of
nickel
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 was the lowest, which was 1%. Turning next to copper,
it is clear that
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 it dropped considerably from January to
March
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 when it reached a dip of about -0.5% of
change
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.
Although
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 it plateaued at 1% from July to September, it grew to approximately 1.5% in December.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words nickel, zinc, change, price, march with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dip" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "falls" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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