In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
In many countries of the world has
discussion
between Add an article
a discussion
two
opinion
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opinions
of
paid Change preposition
about
work
from
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for
children
. One part of people suppose that this
is completely wrong, while
others think that it is important
experience of working. My point of Add an article
an important
this
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these
two
views, I argue with the work
in children
ages.
The first part of people Change noun form
children's
think
that Change the verb form
thinks
work
for Wrong verb form
working
children
it
is not Correct pronoun usage
apply
the
correctCorrect article usage
apply
,
because it can Remove the comma
apply
be distract
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distract
their
focus Change the pronoun
the
of
their’s Change preposition
from
study
. Say that they are just Fix the agreement mistake
studies
children
they need to take basic knowledges
to pass their exams and Change the wording
knowledge
pieces of knowledge
bits of knowledge
work
with their profile works. For example
, when children
engaged
in Add a missing verb
are engaged
work
his
Focus can Correct pronoun usage
their
be return
to Change the verb form
be returned
the
Correct article usage
apply
work
while
he
need to keep focus only Correct pronoun usage
they
Change preposition
on his
his
school argued Correct pronoun usage
their
with
that they are Change preposition
apply
children
.
One
the other part of people consider it is correct when Correct your spelling
On
children
go to take new skills such
as communication, independent
and so Replace the word
independence
one
. To illustrate I can say my sibling and friends Correct your spelling
on
which
study well and have the time to paid Correct pronoun usage
who
work
. Nowadays they are have
well knowledge of school education Change the verb form
have
also
have social skills which help Correct word choice
and also
to
contact with Correct pronoun usage
them to
community
and good Add an article
the community
work
experience. It is
will be Unnecessary verb
apply
advantages
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advantageous
of
Change preposition
for
person
, if he can complete and take care of Correct article usage
a person
with
any aspects of life.
To summarize, Change preposition
apply
two
views about engaged of
paid Change preposition
in
work
. Both views have possitive
and negative sides. But it Correct your spelling
positive
depend
Change the verb form
depends
of
the Change preposition
on
children
priority. For me it is Change noun form
children's
possitively
if Correct your spelling
positively
children
start paid work
in the school era,
because he learning new skills that help to live in the future but if Remove the comma
apply
he
can continue Correct pronoun usage
they
work
and education process together and keep Correct article usage
the work
balance
between Add an article
a balance
the balance
two
sides.Correct article usage
the two
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