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Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as media for communicating information.State which you consider to be the most effective. Comics Books Radio Television Film Theater.

There are different kinds of communicating
information
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 to media all over the world.
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,
comics
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,
film
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 and theatre. They are
also
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 basic ways to obtain
information
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 and news about everything happening in society. Nowadays, they are very popular in the world and most
people
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 watch them. There are many advantages and disadvantages of these things. On the positive side, these things give
People
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 a lot of
information
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 and experiences about different conditions happening in today's society.
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, many Actors in
film
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 and theatre will have roles in different conditions. And in the
comics
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,
People
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 write critical articles and humour. They may show the attitude of the government to the population by criticising ways, and how new devices in technology are used in other things. When
people
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 read and watch them, they may know their opportunities to do something, they get cultural entertainment and their perspectives will expand. And I consider the most effective and better is
film
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. Because of
this
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, it informs us about
cons
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the cons
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 of
people
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. And everyone
watch
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 them in the house rather than
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comics
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in comics
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 and theatres. On the
down side
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, it may bad effect
to
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on
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 everyone.
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, if
people
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 watch different demon stations or spectacles in the
film
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 or theatre and read various articles in the
comics
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, they may not understand truly.
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, it may be
time-consuming
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a time-consuming
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 process
that
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apply
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when we have less time to do
also
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 other
works
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work
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. And many
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People
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people
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 may make
wrong
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the wrong
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conclusion
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conclusions
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 from
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the informations
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informations
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information
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.
To sum up
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, it can be
reiterate
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 that communicating
information
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 through
comics
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, films and theatres has both advantages and disadvantages.
However
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,
advantages
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the advantages
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 are
little
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a little
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 more. Because
,
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apply
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people
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 may get necessary
informations
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information
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 and make
true
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a true
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 conclusion for them.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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