In the past people usually stayed in one place throughout their life.These days people often move around.They often live in several different places in their lifetime.What are the advantages and disadvantages of both?
Many years ago,
people
live in only one place
throughout their live
. Nowadays,they are living in several diverse places in their lifetime .
There are a lot of different causes why Replace the word
lives
do
Unnecessary verb
apply
people
live in a
several diverse places .Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
Firstly
, some people
may suffer from a financial side . So, they may go to
Change preposition
apply
the
abroad, live there and make enough money for their living, because of Correct article usage
apply
this
a lack of workplace in their countries . Secondly
, in some industrial cities, people
are suffering from a lot of diverse illnesses, cause
Wrong verb form
caused
of
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by
the
pollution of Correct article usage
apply
air
. So,they are leaving their cities and going Correct article usage
the air
another
village or cities to live. Change preposition
to another
Thirdly
,a lack of residence because of the density of population
.That three examples are the reasons Correct article usage
the population
of
why Change preposition
apply
people
move around the place
to place
.
On the other hand
, this
condition has a
several Correct article usage
apply
of
Change preposition
apply
advantage
sides ,Fix the agreement mistake
advantages
also
.For instance
, when the
Correct article usage
apply
people
go to other
Change the wording
another place
other places
place
,it would be useful for their healthy,financial side and other things.
However
,on the downside,its cons is
not less.Because,if they do that,Change the verb form
are
social
, commercial and cultural sides of the government will be lower.Correct article usage
the social
For example
,the products of agriculture, population
of Add an article
the population
state
and Add an article
the state
people
in the educational category will be decrease
.Change the verb form
be decreased
This
is a negative influence to
the development of Change preposition
on
state
.Add an article
the state
Then
, the state will be down from top
of Add an article
the top
states
.
In conclusion,it's good that stay in one Correct article usage
the states
place
or live in other
Change the wording
another place
other places
place
,also
.However
,live
in their own Wrong verb form
living
place
is better than move
around. Because it is useful not only for them Wrong verb form
moving
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
their
government.Change preposition
for their
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...