In the past people usually stayed in one place throughout their life.These days people often move around.They often live in several different places in their lifetime.What are the advantages and disadvantages of both?

Many years ago,
people
live in only one
place
throughout their
live
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. Nowadays,they are living in several diverse places in their lifetime . There are a lot of different causes why
do
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people
live in
a
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several diverse places .
Firstly
, some
people
may suffer from a financial side . So, they may go
to
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the
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abroad, live there and make enough money for their living, because of
this
a lack of workplace in their countries .
Secondly
, in some industrial cities,
people
are suffering from a lot of diverse illnesses,
cause
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of
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the
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pollution of
air
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. So,they are leaving their cities and going
another
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village or cities to live.
Thirdly
,a lack of residence because of the density of
population
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the population
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.That three examples are the reasons
of
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why
people
move around the
place
to
place
.
On the other hand
,
this
condition has
a
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several
of
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advantage
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sides ,
also
.
For instance
, when
the
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people
go to
other
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another place
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place
,it would be useful for their healthy,financial side and other things.
However
,on the downside,its cons
is
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are
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not less.Because,if they do that,
social
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the social
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, commercial and cultural sides of the government will be lower.
For example
,the products of agriculture,
population
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the population
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of
state
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the state
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and
people
in the educational category will
be decrease
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.
This
is a negative influence
to
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the development of
state
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the state
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.
Then
, the state will be down from
top
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the top
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of
states
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the states
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. In conclusion,it's good that stay in one
place
or live in
other
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another place
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place
,
also
.
However
,
live
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living
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in their own
place
is better than
move
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moving
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around. Because it is useful not only for them
,
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but
also
their
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for their
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government.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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