The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Given two diagrams portray the ways to reach a hospital in
Change the article
the year
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year
Fix the agreement mistake
years
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2007 and 2010.
Overall
, we
observe
Wrong verb form
observed
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in 2007
the
Correct word choice
that the
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car
parking facility was being utilized by both, the public
as well as
the staff.
While in
Correct word choice
In
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2010, there
are
Wrong verb form
were
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two
seperate
Correct your spelling
separate
parking, one for staff and another for
public
Add an article
the public
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.
To begin
with, looking at
2007
Correct article usage
the 2007
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map we see very little development. There is only a single
road
that approaches the hospital.
Similarly
, a bus stop can be seen in the east of
city
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the city
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hospital.
However
, a
car
park facility is available in the north of
city
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the city
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road
.
Furthermore
, in 2010 a lot of development
is
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was
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observed.
Although
, the bus stop has been removed.
Nevertheless
, a roundabout is made there for ease.
In addition
, two new roundabouts are constructed on
hospital
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the hospital
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road
which
are
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is
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connected to a bus station on its left and staff
car
parking on its right.
Lastly
, for
patients
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patients'
patient's
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ease, a separate public
car
parking is built adjacent to
ring
Correct your spelling
Ring Road
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road
.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words car, road with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic flow
  • road access
  • ring road
  • bus stops
  • bus station
  • congestion
  • parking facilities
  • pedestrian crossings
  • vehicular flow
  • organizational structure
  • accessibility
  • enhancements
  • configuration
  • dedicated
  • diverting traffic
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