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The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The preceding bar chart depicts the proportions of the total world
population
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 in
India
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,
China
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,
U.S.A
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the U.S.A
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, and
Japan
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 between 1950 and 2000, It
also
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 shows predictions of
population
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 in 2050.
Overall
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,
China
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 has the largest
population
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 in the globe, followed by
India
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,
U.S.A
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U.S.A.
,
then
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japan
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Japan
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 comes at the
last
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 place.
China
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 and
Japan
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 are showing a gradual decrease in their
population
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in contrast
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 to
India
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 which is showing a gradual increase in their citizens count. There is a gradual decline in the percentage of
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china
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China
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 people count, going from an all-time high of (26%) in 1950, to (24%) in 2000 , and it is estimated to fall to nearly (19%) in 2050.
on the other hand
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India
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 has shown a gradual increase in the
population
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 going from (15%) to (19%) in 1950 and 2000 respectively. It is predicted to reach (21%) in 2050 being the highest nation in people count. There is a gradual drop in
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Japan
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Japan's
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population
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 by nearly (1%) throughout the time period, making it the lowest occupied country among the four.
while
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U.S.A
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the U.S.A
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 started with (10%) in 1950,
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 dropped to approximately (8%) in 2000, it is predicted to stay the same in 2050.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, india, china, japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bar chart
  • World population
  • Percentage
  • Projection
  • Demographics
  • Trend
  • Significant change
  • Ranking
  • Shifts
  • Decline
  • Growth
  • Comparative
  • Population distribution
  • Notable
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Population dynamics
  • Data interpretation
  • Summarize
  • Trends over time
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