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The two pie charts below show changes in world population by region between 1900 and 2000. Summarise the information by choosing and reporting the key features, and make any relevant comparisons.

The two pie charts below show changes in world population by region between 1900 and 2000. Summarise the information by choosing and reporting the key features, and make any relevant comparisons.
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The given two pie
chats
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charts
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 below
gives
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 information on the changes in the worldwide
population
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 of different places between the period 1900 and 2000.
Overall
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, during both the period Asia had the largest
population
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 in the
world
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.
Whereas
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north
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America
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 was stable during both
the
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period. The worldwide
population
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 during 1900 was about 1,600 million. Asia had the largest percentage of
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population
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the population
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 in the
world
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 with 60% of
total
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the total
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.
While
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 Europe had 25%
population
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 (including Russia). The two western continents North
America
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 and Africa contributed 5% and 4.5% respectively. Latin
America
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 had 3%
population
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 in the
world
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whereas
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 other places were about 2.5% during 1900. The worldwide
population
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 during 2000 had reached
to
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almost
6billion
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6 billion
. Same as 1900, in 2000 Asia had the largest
population
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 in the
world
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 but with
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 in the percentage to 54%. North
America
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 was at
same
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the same
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 percentage as
1900
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in 1900
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. Africa and Latin
America
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 had almost doubled
the
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population
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 during 2000. The Middle East and North Africa region had 6% of
total
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the total
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population
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, world, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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