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Some people will believe that robots will replace classroom teacher in the future. To what extend do you agree or disagree

#people #robots #classroom #teacher #future
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Globally usage of artificial intelligence (AI) has increased in every area
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while
 creating a more sophisticated lifestyle ,
Meanwhile
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this
technology
 may affect the educational system, especially for teaching methods. As a high-end ,
technology
 AI may be effective in the
classroom
 as a
teacher
, but definitely it is not efficient in the
classroom
, because AI has to interfere with children.
Therefore
 I strongly disagree with using AI as a
teacher
. It is widely recognized that AI
technology
 depends on the fed information, and it can't give a response beyond the fed information ,
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 it is unable to identify personal emotions and respond
according to
 the situation ,
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students
 are human beings ,
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 they are not enough
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 to control their emotions.
Therefore
 there must be a person to identify the situation of the
students
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 and lead them to educational activities. For instance, there may be
students
 who are with worst performance, even though they had a very good performance history.
This
 may be
due to
 some stress conditions. In
this
 type of ,situations there must be human beings to discuss with
students
 and support them to solve the problem.
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 AI can be used in the
classroom
 to assess the level of knowledge effectively, at that time
also
 if the information fed may not be enough to asses the
students
 with different capabilities.
Then
 it is not efficient in assessing
students
' knowledge. In conclusion, I would assert that even though AI is an effective
technology
 for replacing the
teacher
 in a
classroom
, It is not more efficient as a
teacher
.
Therefore
 I strongly disagree with replacing teachers with artificial intelligence in a
classroom
.
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