The bar chart shows coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cuties. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and comparisons where relevant.

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The provided bar graph information the change in

people

buying

with

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apply

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fresh and

instant

coffee

and drinking

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the

cafe

duaring

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during

last

4 weeks in five Australian cities , the data

presented

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is presented

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the

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percentage scale.

Overall

people

tend to buy

instant

coffee

more than fresh

coffee

. And, they like to

going

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cafe

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cafes

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and

drinking

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drink

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coffee

and tea more than take out. In detail, among five cities,

the

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apply

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Melbourne's

people

spend

many

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much

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time at the

cafe

. But, the Adeiade's

people

spend little time. And, the

Hobart's

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Hobart

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people

like to buy

instant

coffee

On the other hand

the

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apply

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Sydney's

people

love to buy fresh

coffee

than

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more than

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instant

coffee

In addition

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out the

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the

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apply

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Sydney's

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Sydney

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people

6 in 10 had been

went

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going

gone

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cafe

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a cafe

the cafe

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last

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the last

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4 Weeks. But, they had

been

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apply

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bought fresh

coffee

and

instant

coffee

same

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the same

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period about 40% and around 45%

repectively

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respectively

Moreover

, the Adeiade's

people

adout

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about

a half bought

instant

coffee

and went to

cafe

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the cafe

a cafe

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However

, buying

fesh

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fresh

fish

coffee

people

were just around 35%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, instant, coffee, cafe with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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6
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
4
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
25
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

166 words

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The bar chart shows coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cuties. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and comparisons where relevant.

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