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The bar chart shows coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cuties. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cuties. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and comparisons where relevant.
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The provided bar graph information the change in
people
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 buying
with
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fresh and
instant
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coffee
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 and drinking
at
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in
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 the
cafe
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duaring
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during
last
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 4 weeks in five Australian cities , the data
presented
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is presented
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 on
the
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a
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 percentage scale.
Overall
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,
people
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 tend to buy
instant
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coffee
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 more than fresh
coffee
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. And, they like to
going
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go
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 to
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cafe
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cafes
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 and
drinking
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drink
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coffee
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 and tea more than take out. In detail, among five cities,
the
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Melbourne's
people
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 spend
many
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much
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 time at the
cafe
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. But, the Adeiade's
people
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 spend little time. And, the
Hobart's
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Hobart
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people
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 like to buy
instant
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coffee
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.
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,
the
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Sydney's
people
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 love to buy fresh
coffee
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than
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more than
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instant
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coffee
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.
In addition
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,
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out the
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the
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Sydney's
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Sydney
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people
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 6 in 10 had been
went
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going
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 to
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cafe
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a cafe
the cafe
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 in
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last
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the last
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 4 Weeks. But, they had
been
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apply
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bought fresh
coffee
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 and
instant
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coffee
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 in
same
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the same
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 period about 40% and around 45%
repectively
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respectively
.
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, the Adeiade's
people
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adout
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about
 a half bought
instant
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coffee
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 and went to
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cafe
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the cafe
a cafe
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.
However
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, buying
fesh
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fresh
fish
coffee
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people
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 were just around 35%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, instant, coffee, cafe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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