The bar chart shows coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cuties. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and comparisons where relevant.

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The provided bar graph information the change in

people

buying

with

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apply

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fresh and

instant

coffee

and drinking

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the

cafe

duaring

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during

last

4 weeks in five Australian cities , the data

presented

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is presented

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the

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percentage scale.

Overall

people

tend to buy

instant

coffee

more than fresh

coffee

. And, they like to

going

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cafe

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cafes

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and

drinking

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drink

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coffee

and tea more than take out. In detail, among five cities,

the

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apply

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Melbourne's

people

spend

many

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much

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time at the

cafe

. But, the Adeiade's

people

spend little time. And, the

Hobart's

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Hobart

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people

like to buy

instant

coffee

On the other hand

the

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apply

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Sydney's

people

love to buy fresh

coffee

than

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more than

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instant

coffee

In addition

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out the

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the

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apply

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Sydney's

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Sydney

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people

6 in 10 had been

went

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going

gone

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cafe

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a cafe

the cafe

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last

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the last

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4 Weeks. But, they had

been

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apply

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bought fresh

coffee

and

instant

coffee

same

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the same

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period about 40% and around 45%

repectively

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respectively

Moreover

, the Adeiade's

people

adout

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about

a half bought

instant

coffee

and went to

cafe

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the cafe

a cafe

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However

, buying

fesh

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fresh

fish

coffee

people

were just around 35%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, instant, coffee, cafe with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
25Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

166 words

5.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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The bar chart shows coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cuties. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and comparisons where relevant.

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Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Some people believe that good teamwork is what makes companies successful. Others feel that it is more important to have a good leader. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centres or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or a negative development ?