The chart below shows the Japan's population by age groups starting in 1960 and including a forecast to 2040.

The chart below shows the Japan's population by age groups starting in 1960 and including a forecast to 2040.
The illustrated line graph gives data on the forecast of the
Japanese
by their age ranges from 1960 to 2040.
Overall
, the proportion of people aged 25-64 stays nearly the same,
while
the rate of 0-14 aged people declines throughout the period.
To begin
, 0 to 14 years aged
Japanese
citizens form 30% of the whole population
whereas
,
this
particular indicator for 65+ old citizens accounts for only approximately 5% in 1960.
However
, in the
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these markers will hit an equilibrium of 20%.
After
this
point, the tendency changes. In detail, the portion of 0-14 aged
Japanese
goes down to 10%,
in contrast
the percentage of elder (65+)
Japanese
people
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over 30% by 2040. The ratio for the middle-aged (25-64) populace of Japan fluctuates slightly over the given time frame. So
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,
this
figure represents around 65% at the beginning of the shown specified interval and reaches its peak in 1970 and 1990 with a sharp 70%. To the end of the noted span of time, the percentage drops to just below 60%.
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