The graph below shows the proportions of workers in three different sectors in South Korea between 1981 and 2011

The graph below shows the proportions of workers in three different sectors in South Korea between 1981 and 2011
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The line chart illustrates the percentage of workers in three sectors in South Korea during 1981-2011.
Overall
, between 1981-2011, The majority of employment worked in the service sector.
Moreover
, the employment
rate
in the service has an upward trend
while
agriculture has a downward shift.
To begin
with, the employment
rate
for the service sector in 1981 was just slightly under 40% and keep went up steadily to approximately 70%
at the end
of the period (2011).
Conversely
, the worker's proportion in the agriculture sector just drops during the period. In 1981, the
rate
of workers in agriculture was just above 30%
then
decreased significantly until 1991 to 10% and
then
it progressively declined and
finally
dropped sharply and hit a low of roughly 5% in 2011.
On the other hand
, the
rate
of workers in the industry has fluctuated during the period. In 1981 there was just under 30% worker in industry and
then
it keeps increasing to just about 35% in 1991 and
then
progressively falling until 2011 to around 25%
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