The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 

Write at least 150 words.
The provided line chart illustrates information about
change
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the change
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in the number of people living in countries between 1970 and 2040, the data presented
10-years
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10-year
interval
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and on the percentage scale.
Overall
, in 2020, the higher
population
contry
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country
is Malaysia.
Also
, the lower
population
contry
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country
is
thailand
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Thailand
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. In detail, Thailand's
population
increased to about 30% from 1970 to 1990, And
then
, they
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almost did not
changed
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between 2000 and 2020.
However
, their
population
figure will
be
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increase to
aroud
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around
50%
until in
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2040.
In addition
, the number of people
of
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in
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Malaysia had 30% in 1970. But, they will
be
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go up to 80% in 2040.
Also
,
Indonesia
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Indonesia's
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pollution had about 15% in 1970,
However
,
they
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it
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will increase to around 60% too. And, Philippines people figure was up and down to 30%, 50% ,40% and in 1970, in 1990 ,in 2010
repectively
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respectively
.
On the other hand
, after in 2010, they will again
incresea
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increase
to 50% until
in
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apply
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2040.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • cities
  • Asian countries
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • estimations
  • urban
  • increasing
  • steadily
  • Japan
  • China
  • rise
  • urbanization
  • South Korea
  • India
  • upward trend
  • slow pace
  • surpass
  • resided
  • projected
  • moderate increase
  • significant surge
  • exceed
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