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The line graph shows the information average number of visitors entering a museum in summer and winter in 2003.

The line graph shows the information average number of visitors entering a museum in summer and winter in 2003.
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The given line graph
compare
Change the verb form
compares
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 the
amount
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number
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 of people who visited
to
Remove the preposition
apply
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museum
Add an article
the museum
a museum
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 in the UK during summer and winter in 2003.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that
most
Correct quantifier usage
more
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 people
were
Unnecessary verb
apply
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visited
in
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on
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 summer days than
winter
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in winter
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.
In addition
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, there was a significant
changes
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change
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 in two seasons.
To begin
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 with, the numbers
were
Unnecessary verb
apply
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rose to
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approximately
approximatly
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approximately
 1600 after some fluctuations ,
while
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 in winter visitors

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