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The line graph shows the information average number of visitors entering a museum in summer and winter in 2003.

The line graph shows the information average number of visitors entering a museum in summer and winter in 2003.
#line #information #visitors #museum #summer #winter
The given line graph
compare
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compares
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 the
amount
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number
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 of people who visited
to
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apply
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museum
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the museum
a museum
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 in the UK during summer and winter in 2003.
Overall
, it is clear from the graph that
most
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more
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 people
were
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apply
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visited
in
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on
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 summer days than
winter
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in winter
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.
In addition
, there was a significant
changes
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change
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 in two seasons.
To begin
 with, the numbers
were
Unnecessary verb
apply
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rose to
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approximately
approximatly
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approximately
 1600 after some fluctuations ,
while
 in winter visitors
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