The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart demonstrates the average changes of
people
were
born in Correct pronoun usage
who were
Australia
and who were born abroad of
Change preposition
in
Australia
in different areas, urbans
, Correct your spelling
urban
rural
between 1995 and 2010.
Correct word choice
and rural
Overall
the highest birth
average number
outside and inside Australia
in 1995 was in rural areas. While
,
the Remove the comma
apply
number
of birth
in rural declined in 2010 to people
who are abroad or inside Australia
.
In 1995 the number
of birth
in cities inside Australia
and outside Australia
was 55% and 60% respectively. While
the number
of people
who were born abroad in town 50
% the Add a missing verb
was 50
number
of people
Australian, (from 20 % to 10%), the proportion number
of birth
in cities outside Australia
was higher around 25%.
In 2010 the number
of people
who were born in rural and town region were
around 15% but it made Change the verb form
was
difference
to be around 5% less in Correct article usage
a difference
rural
area than Add an article
a rural
the rural
towns
. Both years 1995 and 2010 scored around 20% higher in the Change preposition
in towns
birth
of cities outside Australia
than inside.Submitted by solimanfarag777 on
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