The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart demonstrates the average changes of
people
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were
born in Correct pronoun usage
who were
Australia
and who were born abroad Use synonyms
of
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in
Australia
in different areas, Use synonyms
urbans
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urban
rural
between 1995 and 2010.
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and rural
Overall
the highest Linking Words
birth
average Use synonyms
number
outside and inside Use synonyms
Australia
in 1995 was in rural areas. Use synonyms
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number
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birth
in rural declined in 2010 to Use synonyms
people
who are abroad or inside Use synonyms
Australia
.
In 1995 the Use synonyms
number
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birth
in cities inside Use synonyms
Australia
and outside Use synonyms
Australia
was 55% and 60% respectively. Use synonyms
While
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number
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number
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people
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number
of Use synonyms
birth
in cities outside Use synonyms
Australia
was higher around 25%.
In 2010 the Use synonyms
number
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people
who were born in rural and town region Use synonyms
were
around 15% but it made Change the verb form
was
difference
to be around 5% less in Correct article usage
a difference
rural
area than Add an article
a rural
the rural
towns
. Both years 1995 and 2010 scored around 20% higher in the Change preposition
in towns
birth
of cities outside Use synonyms
Australia
than inside.Use synonyms
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