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The diagram below illustrates how a simple water filter is constructed and how it functions to produce clean drinking water. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below illustrates how a simple water filter is constructed and how it functions to produce clean drinking water. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided diagram depicts the
prosedure
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procedure
 of
water
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 filtering production, including how it works and how the entire step of the
process
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 happened.
Overall
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, the
process
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 of cleaning
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water
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the water
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 generator is divided into 2 stages,
started
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starting
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from
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with
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 filtering using sand, charcoal and gravel respectively, resulting a healthy
hygene
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hygiene
water
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 before it
save
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saves
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 into
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storage
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a storage
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 drum. In
the
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apply
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stage one, the
water
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 is
pour
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poured
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 into
plastic
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a plastic
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 barrel, the
storage
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 tank with
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a water-filter
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water-filter
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water filter
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 which have 3
layer
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layers
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 of filtering
process
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 with the plastic lid
in
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on
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 the top side, before it will pass into
sand
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the sand
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 filter, and continue to
charcoal
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the charcoal
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 filter and enter
the
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the the
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 gravel section. The
water
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 will
continues
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continue
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 to flow through
second
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the second
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 tank which is
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storage
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a storage
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 tank using
pipe
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a pipe
the pipe
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. The second stage is
water
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storage
storaging
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storage
, the
process
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 of collecting the clean
water
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 into
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storage
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a storage
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 drum, offering
easy
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an easy
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 way to use
this
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water
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such
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 as drink or bottle filling using 2 ways valve to open and closed the
water
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 pipe, which can
makes
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make
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 the
water
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 filling through
storage
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 drum is effective as possible
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, process, storage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • illustrates
  • simple water filter
  • constructed
  • functions
  • produce
  • clean drinking water
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • relevant
  • introduction
  • explanation
  • construction
  • description
  • filtered water
  • original water source
  • conclusion
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