The graph gives information about the consumption of fast food in the UK from 1970 to 1990.

The graph gives information about the consumption of fast food in the UK from 1970 to 1990.
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The line chart illustrates the number and the type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. Fast food is divided into three types (Hamburger, Pizza, and Fish & Chips)
Overall
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, the
consumption
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of pizza and hamburgers by Australian teenagers went up over time
while
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the
consumption
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of fish and chips dropped in the final year.
To begin
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with, the
consumption
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of hamburgers by Australian teenagers in the early year was under 20,
then
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it massively increased to just above 80 in 1984, and
finally
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steadily increased and remain stable at 100 until 2000. The same trend just happened to pizza which start from almost zero in 1975 and
finally
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reach a peak and remain stable at just above 80 during 1995 – 2000.
Conversely
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, the favourite fast food in 1975 was fish and chips with a total of 100
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a year, it fluctuated until 1985 and
finally
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progressively dropped over time to around 40 in 2000.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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