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Some people think that the government should decide which subjects should students study at the University while other believe that students should be allowed to apply for subjects they prefer. Discuss both views.

#people #government #subjects #students #study #university
Nowdays
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 the
government
 should select
major
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the major
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 of
students
 in university. some people believe that the
government
 should choose
students
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students'
student's
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major
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majors
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 at the University.
However
other
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others
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 think
students
 have permission to select
that
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the
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 major they like. In
this
 essay,I will explain both sides of the
subject
.
firstly
,the
government
 should do justice between clever
students
 and inactive
students
 so everyone has
right
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the right
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 to be in
right
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the right
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 position.
For instance
, in Iran
students
 have to get the Concor exam and get
reasonable
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a reasonable
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 score
then
 go to university if they can not get it they failed. it is not easy to get what you want.the
government
 analyse the
students
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student's
students'
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 ability for
subject
 .they must
suitable
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be suitable
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 for
subject
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the subject
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.
In
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On
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 the other hand, they have
right
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the right
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 to choose their major. some people study which
subject
 that the
government
 decide
it
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apply
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and they
have
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do have
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 not any passion
on
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for
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 it so they can not
continu
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continue
 it and they abandoned their major
also
 it is not good for the
government
 because the number of their
students
have
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has
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 decreased.
Furthermore
, maybe the amount of young
labor
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labour
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have
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has
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decline
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declined
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 either. In conclusion, the
government
 have to decide about
education
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the education
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 of teenagers
that
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so that
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 it does not get
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the intrest
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intrest
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interest
 of
sudents
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students
also
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and also
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 it makes
balance
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a balance
the balance
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 between
students
. it will be good for both sides.
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