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Number of books borrowed from four village libraries. The line table shows the number of books that have been interacted from different four rural libraries since June and September 2014 and the pie chart presents

Number of books borrowed from four village libraries. The line table shows the number of books that have been interacted from different four rural libraries since June and September 2014 and the pie chart presents
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The line table shows the
number
 of
books
 that have been interacted from different four rural libraries since June and September 2014 and the pie chart presents data on the types of
books
 that were most taken from rural libraries. In general,it is clear from the graph that the model fluctuated significantly,
expect
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except
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 for Rey slip,and the most borrowed type.
According to
 the schedule,Rey
slip
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Slip
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 lent more than 300
books
 to it"s customers in June,which was the
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highest rate
 among these three libraries.But over time,the
number
 of
books
 has significantly decreased to 150.250
books
 interacted in Sutton-Wood,and
this
 is more than in West Eaton and Church Mount,but after a
while
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this
number
 of
books
that
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apply
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borrowed
their
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from their
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 customers grew from 50
books
 to 150
books
.In Sutton Wood,noticeable numbers were changed,they decreased from 250 to 100 and in September increased to 300
books
,which shows the highest
number
 of
books
.The
number
 of book interactions decreased in Rey
slip
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slipping
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 to 150
books
. The most popular type of interaction of
books
 was fiction,it was 43%,and almost a fifth of the genre interacted with biographies and it was 19%.The lowest were Self-Hepl,history,
fiction
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and fiction
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the
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were 14% and 10%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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