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The bar chart below shows the percentage of households with access to the internet in three European countries between 2007 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart below shows the percentage of households with access to the internet in three European countries between 2007 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar chart below shows the percentage of households in three European countries
access
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that access
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 the
internet
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Internet
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 in the period
of
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apply
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2007 to 2019. Looking from an
overall
 perspective,
the
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apply
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Germany
, the
UK
 the
Spain
 increased their percentage of
family
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families
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 with internet connection between 2007 to 2019. The bar chart illustrates
,
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apply
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the
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that
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Germany
 has 95%
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of clan
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clan
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clans
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 with internet connectivity in 2019. Among
three
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the three
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 countries named
the
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apply
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Germany
, the
UK
,
the
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apply
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Spain
.
The
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apply
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Spain
 has the least wifi connection in their home in 2007. The
Gremany
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Germany
 started with 70% in 2007 and ended with 95% in 2019. There
is
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apply
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rose steadily during the interval of time. The
UK
 has 60% in the
begining
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beginning
 of 2007, 10% decreased compared with
the
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Germany
. It rises from the following years till 2019. There is no dip during
this
 period.
The
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Spain
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spain
 has 45% in 2007. 15% lower compared with the
UK
.
The
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apply
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Spain
 grows the percentage from 2007 to 2019.
The
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apply
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Spain
 finished with 90%. In total 45% high in the gap of 15 years.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words germany, uk, spain with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Household internet access
  • Percentage (%)
  • European countries
  • Twelve-year period
  • Technological advancement
  • Digital connectivity
  • Yearly/periodic growth
  • Significant increase
  • Government initiatives
  • Technological breakthroughs
  • Rapid growth
  • Policy changes
  • Infrastructure development
  • Economic factors
  • Plateaus
  • Saturation points
  • Societal impacts
  • Economic impacts
  • Remote work
  • Digital commerce
  • Future projections
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