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The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultutal land becomes less productive.The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990's. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comaparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultutal land becomes less productive.The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990's. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comaparisons where relevant.
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The graph given below depicts the reasons for
land
degradation
 worldwide and by
region
.There are
three
regions
 which are represented in the pie chart,these
three
regions
 were affected by the world war during the
1990's
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1990s
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. During the 1990's many
regions
 of the world were affected,out of which
three
regions
 are mentioned. The pie chart
illustartes
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illustrates
 why
the
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agricultural
land
 has become less productive and how
this
 affected the other
regions
 . When we check the pie chart of worldwide
land
degradation
 there are four categories in total,
deforestation
,
over cultivation
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over-cultivation
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,
over grazing
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over-grazing
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 and others. Among the four causes ,over-grazing constitutes more towards worldwide
land
degradation
 and
deforestation
considered
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 to be the second. The next is the causes of
land
degradation
 by
region
.There
are
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total
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a total
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 of
three
regions
,North America,Europe,
Oceania
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and Oceania
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.The reasons listed are of
three
 types,
deforestation
,
over grazing
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over-grazing
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 and
over cultivation
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over-cultivation
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.North America and Oceania were least affected by the
three
 reasons.As the percentage of
the
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land
 degraded is higher in all
the
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three
,it makes
europe
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Europe
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 the most affected
region
.
Deforestation
 and
over grazing
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overgrazing
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 account for most of the
land
degradation
 by
region
 and worldwide. Europe
being
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 the most affected
region
 ,the total
land
 degraded is around 23%.
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