the pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. the table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant

the pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. the table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant
The graph below determines the
reasons
for lesser
prouctivity
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productivity
in agricultural
land
worldiwde
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worldwide
, it
also
focuses on
three
major
regions
of the world. Both the
tabels
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tables
give us preeminent
reasons
for
land
degradion
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degradation
and
also
classifies
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them into smaller criteria which provides us with a clear picture
for
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the cause. The
pie-chart
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pie chart
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depicts four major
reasons
for
land
degradation
in the world and
also
determines the
percenatge
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percentage
of damage each
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has done, it
also
vividly
comapres
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compares
three
regions
of the world and summarises the percentage of
land
degraded in a particular region. The
reasons
shown in the pie chart are
over grazing
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over-grazing
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,
deforestation
,
over-cultivation
and other. 35% of the
land
is degraded
due to
over-grazing which could be easily avoided by secluding only
few
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a few
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areas for the
cattles
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cattle
castles
, the other major reason is
deforestation
the
land
loses all its fertility and takes a long time to revive, it
also
predominently
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predominantly
prominently
affects the environment by adding to the global warming, 28% of the
land
is degraded by
over-cultivation
, it takes away all the nutrients and the strength of the soil. The second table shows a comparison between 3 major
regions
of the country that are North America,Europe and
Ocenia
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Oceania
, The damage
of
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land
done by each region is
sub-divided
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subdivided
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into
three
criterias
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criteria
.i.e
deforestation
,
over-cultivation
and over-grazing. Among all the
three
regions
Europe
resulted
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more
of
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land
degradation
by holding 23% the major causes were
deforestation
9.8%,
over-cultivation
7.7% and over-grazing 5.5%.
Ocenia
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Oceania
held the major share of 11.3% of
land
degradation
due to
over grazing
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over-grazing
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among the
three
in contrast
to that it
also
had
least
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the least
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degradation
due to
over-cultivation
. North America had the least percentage of damage by only holding 5% of
degarded
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degraded
land
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words reasons, land, three, regions, degradation, deforestation, over-cultivation with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pie chart
  • Table
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Decreasing productivity
  • Reasons
  • Regional variations
  • Data
  • Summarize
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