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The chart illustrates the number of people from history museums, British museums, national museums and science museums who visited different museums in London.

The chart illustrates the number of people from history museums, British museums, national museums and science museums who visited different museums in London.
The diagram exposes the total of
visitors
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 to four different museums in London from
June
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 to August.
It is clear that
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 from the chart, National
Museum
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, History
Museum
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, British
Museum
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 and Science
Museum
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 have fluctuating guests from month to month.
However
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, the British
Museum
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 has the highest total visitor among others during the time range.
To begin
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 with, we can say that the British
Museum
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 is the
most
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favourite
museum
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 to visit because it has the highest number of guests. Starting in
June
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, it has around 400,000 guests and remains stable until July. In August it has a drastic surge to almost 750,000
visitors
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.
Then
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, it gradually decreased in the next two months.
In contrast
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, the National
Museum
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 is the least favourite compared to others because only 200,000 people came to the National
Museum
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 in
June
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. After that, there is a slight decline in the number of people in July. Fortunately, in August it has more
visitors
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 came to the
museum
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 and reached around 300,000.
On the other hand
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, it started to drop from September to October with only less than 190,000
visitors
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.
While
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 looking at History
Museum
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 data, it has the second-highest total number of people visiting the
museum
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 from
June
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 to October.

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