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you recently organised an all day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter Say what the participants liked about the hotel Explain why they were unhappy about the food Suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in future

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 is regarding my feedback o
quality
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the quality
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 of
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the foods
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foods
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food
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 that
recently
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was recently
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organiseed
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organised
 in your
compnay
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company
 and my office
collegues
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colleagues
 felt
disappoitment
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disappointment
on
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about
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 it. From the
beggining
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beginning
 the
ambians
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ambience
 and gesture
was
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were
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 excellent! literally hall space is sufficient and proper seating arrangements,following
to
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the air
conditioining
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conditioning
is
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are
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 good and neat
hygine
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hygiene
 restrooms
was
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were
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 clean.
On the other hand
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, everything feels good except the food
qulity
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quality
,
vegetables
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the vegetables
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 are salty, spicy and oil,
the
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and the
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 rice is overcooked.
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similarly
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 catering persons are too slow,
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finally
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 sweets served
is
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are
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 not good and the
taste
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 is too sweet.
Furthermore
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, to improve
this
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 in future avoid adding more
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 for the starters because it will spoil the entire
taste
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 of the
recepie
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recipe
. if you felt anything bad
taste
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 the items once the cooking finishes and before moving onto
serving
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the serving
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 table. one of my humble suggestion is to buy
a
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apply
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fresh vegetables because clean vegetables gives a food
taste
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 better than we expected and it will
cooked
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cook
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 very juicy. Looking forward
for
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you
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 response too in future events. Thanks & Regards Shyam Ranjith S

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Compliments
  • Ambiance
  • Professionalism
  • Hospitality
  • Quality
  • Variety
  • Freshness
  • Catering
  • Menu options
  • Dietary requirements
  • Feedback
  • Survey
  • Collaboration
  • Improvements
  • Rectify
  • Gastronomy
  • Culinary
  • Hospitality industry
  • Client satisfaction
  • Constructive criticism
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