The table below describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901.

The table below describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901.
The table represents information about
number
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the number
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of workers and
factories
in England and Wales over
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5 decades, from 1851 to 1901.
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, it can be seen
significant
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rose
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in
number
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of
factories
,
while
total
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a total
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number
of
employees
have
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dropped throughout the whole period.
Moreover
, the gap between
number
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of male and female
employees
become
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marginally
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. The
number
of total
employees
have
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declined significantly, from 477100 in 1851 to 61000 in 1901.
In addition
, over a decade from 1861 to 1871
factories
lost more than
the
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half of the workers.
Factories
number
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numbers
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, meanwhile, showed a big boom, raising to just under
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three times of initial data(from 225 to 600).
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the beginning of the period,
discrepancy
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the discrepancy
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between male and female workers was approximately 100000 people, declining over the period to reach 1000 individuals in 1901. Another interesting point is that in 1861 there
was
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more female
employees
than male, 160000 and 131780 respectively.
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