The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart displays the percentages of employees, by
sector
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and gender, that worked in Australia the previous year.
Overall
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, the numbers of
men
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working are higher than the ones of
women
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, with the only exception of the professionals and clerical
sector
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.
Furthermore
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, the most famous
sector
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for
men
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was tradespeople,
while
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for
women
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was clerical. First of all,
it is clear that
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for all types of jobs,
men
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had percentages not under 400, the labourer's
sector
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had the lowest statistic with only 400, in comparison to the tradespeople
sector
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, which in the same year stood at 900. Other
sectors
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,
such
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as managers, semi-professionals and production stood between 500 and 600.
On the contrary
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,
women
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were fewer numbers
last
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year, which levelled between 100 and almost 1000. The less common
sectors
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were the production and tradespeople ones. Labourers, managers and semi-professionals had figures between 200 and 350.
On the other hand
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, for both the professional and clerical
sectors
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,
women
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undertook
men
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reaching higher percentages, 700 and 980 respectively,
while
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men
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for the same
sectors
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had roughly 650 and 880 for each.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words sector, men, women, sectors with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Employment figures
  • Sectors
  • Significant disparities
  • Gender balance
  • Skewed
  • Trends
  • Patterns
  • Dominant
  • Inferred
  • Labor market
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Insights
  • Implications
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