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The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The two pie chart displays the percentages on what is the marital status of Canadians and Australian inhabitants.
Overall
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, in both countries, the highest numbers are for
people
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 separated but not divorced, with
Canada
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 having a higher
percentage
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 than Australia,
while
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 most Australians,
instead
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, are married. First of all, the
percentage
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 of being married in
Canada
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 stood at 53%,
while
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 married couples had only a
percentage
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 of 29%. The other categories have lower data, with only 7% for
people
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 that have never been married or are widowed.
On the contrary
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, in Australia, having a
percentage
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 of 46%,
people
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 are more likely to be married, a similar
percentage
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 is shown for married
people
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 who only separated with about 41%. So,
in contrast
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 with
Canada
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, the numbers are not overtaken by separated couples, but we have a more balanced situation.
Furthermore
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, the other categories share a similar
percentage
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 with the one in
Canada
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, widowed
people
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 have 1% less, with only 6%,
while
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 divorce
people
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 have a 2%, in comparison with
Canada
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 which had 1%. and
finally
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, single
people
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 share a
percentage
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 of only 5%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, canada, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 8 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • marital status
  • population
  • pie charts
  • percentage
  • categories
  • Married
  • Single
  • Divorced
  • Widowed
  • distribution
  • noticeable trends
  • comparison
  • significantly different
  • similarities
  • striking differences
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