Mrs Barrett, an English Speaking woman who live in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer. Suggest how can you help her in her home Say why you would like to do this work Explain when you will and will not be available

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Dear Mrs Barret I am writing

this

later regarding

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you. I have many free time as well. I had done

this

job

before too. I will be free next summer as before. I have many ideas about

this

job

Well

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it will be very easy for you. If I got to help you, I can help you by cooking rice, cleaning

floor

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the floor

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, washing dishes, clothes, and many other things I have

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had no

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family

since

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for

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five years because I live alone in

this

town if I got

this

opportunity I will be very happy to do

this

job

. I have four years

experience

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of experience

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this

field. It will be easy for me to do

this

work. I left my before

job

because of lots

problems

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of problems

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and

also

I have a

five time

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five-time

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job

so in a week two days I will be absent, so I think you will accept my words and give me a chance to join you. Waiting for your reply kind regards Mary

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7 paragraphs

166 words

6.50

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Accurate linking words

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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