many manufactured food and drink producks contain high levels of sugar
Recently,
products
with sugar
in which the sugar
ratio is high led to some health problems for people
have become a popular topic and many people
think it is worth discussing. However
, they still have not come to an agreement with each other on whether more expensive should be had sugar
products
to decrease the tendency of people
to eat these or not. Whatever each side of the argument thinks, I strongly agree that definitely, the government must make more expensive sugary products
in order to to
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decline
encourage Add the particle
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people
from these products
product.
There are many reasons why I think so. To begin
with, sugar
is the by far the best harmful food for healthy. It does not only do a disservice to old people
but also
ıt is dangerous material for all ages group, even babies. Also
, consuming sugary products
causes many health problems for people
such
as,
diabetes, and heart disease. Nowadays, the age of diabetes can regress from 40 ages in the past to 10 ages in now. Remove the comma
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Moreover
, at least one person in every family has diabetes. Another reason is that consuming sugar
products
too much can become fat like obesity and rapid weight gain so they can have a bad body
shape and all organs in their body
can cover fat. This
is very dangerous for human beings. For example
, they can tire easily and they cannot find clothes which are suitable for their body
.
On the other hand
, many people
agree that opposite my idea. Firstly
our body
needs sugar
especially the brain because the nutritional source of the brain feeds only sugar
and if the brain has enough sugar
, it will work very well. Therefore
all people
should eat products
with sugar
. ,Also
sugary product gives people
more energy than other food consumption and they improve the balance of our blood instantly. For example
, experts said if somebody blackouts, somebody will eat sugar
products
.
To sum up
, in spite of the fact that sugar
has benefits and needs for some organs, it effect very detrimental to the human body
. In ,addition people
meet sugar
their sugar
needs by eating fruit which includes sugar
. This
is more beneficial than sugar
products
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