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The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates whether people of both genders were studying full-time or part-time during their
further
education
 in Britain in three periods which are 1970, 1980 and 1990. It is worth noticing that the
number
 of
males
 who get part-time
education
 dropped from 1000 to 850 and went up to 900 from 1970 to 1990
while
 the
number
 of females kept increasing. Fewer women get part-time
education
 in 1970 and 1980 than men but the situation inverse in 1990. There were 900 and 1100
males
 and females who accepted part-time
education
 in 1990 respectively. The
number
 of men in full-time
education
 was twice higher as women in 1970.
However
, more women participated in full-time
education
 than men in 1980, and both genders reached the same
number
, 200, in full-time
education
 in 1990.
Overall
, the
number
 of
males
 and females in part-time
education
 is way larger than in full-time
education
.
In addition
, the
number
 of both genders in full and part-time
education
 rose slightly from 1970 to 1990, except for
males
 in part-time
education
 turbulent during
this
 period.
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