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In many countries, people throw away a lot of food from restaurant and shops. Why do you think people waste food in this way? What can be done to reduce the amount of food thrown away?

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Nowadays, the light on economic growth has brought us a convenient lifestyle, we don’t live from hand to mouth before. In recent years, many people have plenty of wasting
food
 behaviours. The question of why people do it and what methods we have to solve the above problems. In my opinion, Each activity will be a reason for it.
This
 essay will explore more of the above problems.
First,
we will discuss why citizens dismiss the
food
. Standing in the perspective of appreciating health, Dismissing the
food
 as too ripe is the right activity. In fact, in some countries, the government take
to
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plenty of rules about saving
food
 and
besides
 health problem will push on the best.
For instance
, in some growing countries, the government encourage populations to use
food
 healthy and
banned using
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 dirty
food
 in society
this
 leads to the health of citizen
will be
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being
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 good.
Second,
we will talk about methods. Standing in the perspective poor person in a poor country. Throwing a lot of
food
 is a waste activity. We
can
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need methods to improve and save.
This
 can be seen in a multitude of supermarkets and shops that dismiss the
food
 when it
totally
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apply
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can be used.
Moreover
, we can solve these problems with limited-income
food
 when we order
food
 to sell or use.
Furthermore
, we can donate the ex-
food
 to charity organizations.
For example
, a lot of
restaurant
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restaurants
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 order
food
 for sale at their shop, though they save very much cost
and
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besides
 if they use the
food
 don’t have on time, they will donate
them
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it
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 to pagodas or regional hospitals. In conclusion. Dismissing
food
has
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is
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 truly positive or negative it lies in the perspective of each individual and team. We
can
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apply
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have a right
looking
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to classify
food
 before throwing
them
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,
Besides
, the government should have suitable policies and create a society sustainable and grows better and better.
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