The chart below shows the percentage of the population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010

The chart below shows the percentage of the population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010
The given bar chart illustrates the amount of the UK population who consumed recommended fruit and vegetables per day from 2002 to 2010.
Overall
,
it is clear that
figures
for
women
are higher in all three years than for
men
and
children
.
To begin
with,
men
accounted for 22% in 2002 which is two times bigger than
children
in
this
year
(11%).
Furthermore
,
this
year
's
figures
for
women
was 25% which is almost the same as
men
in 2010.
Additionally
, in 2006
men
accounted for 28%,
while
this
year
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figures
for
women
were 32% which is two times higher than
children
this
year
(16%).
By contrast
, in 2010
figures
for woman and
children
was 27% and 14% respectively.
Furthermore
,
this
year
's
figures
for
women
was 25% which is almost the same as
men
in 2010.
Additionally
, in 2006
men
accounted for 28%,
while
this
year
figures
for
women
were 32% which is two times higher than
children
this
year
(16%).
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "additionally, furthermore, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words figures, women, men, children, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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