The chart below shows the percentage of the population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010

The chart below shows the percentage of the population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010
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The given bar chart illustrates the amount of the UK population who consumed recommended fruit and vegetables per day from 2002 to 2010.
Overall
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it is clear that
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women
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are higher in all three years than for
men
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and
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.
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men
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accounted for 22% in 2002 which is two times bigger than
children
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in
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year
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(11%).
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this
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year
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figures
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for
women
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was 25% which is almost the same as
men
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in 2010.
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, in 2006
men
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accounted for 28%,
while
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year
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figures
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for
women
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were 32% which is two times higher than
children
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this
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year
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(16%).
By contrast
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, in 2010
figures
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for woman and
children
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was 27% and 14% respectively.
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,
this
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year
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's
figures
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for
women
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was 25% which is almost the same as
men
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in 2010.
Additionally
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, in 2006
men
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accounted for 28%,
while
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this
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year
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figures
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for
women
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were 32% which is two times higher than
children
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this
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year
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(16%).
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "additionally, furthermore, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words figures, women, men, children, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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