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The diagram below show how leather goods are produced.

The diagram below show how leather goods are produced.
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The diagram illustrates the way in which
Luther
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 goods are produced. At the onset,
it is clear that
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,
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apply
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there are 11 stages in the process, begging with drying the
skin
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 under
sun
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the sun
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 for
few
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a few
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 days, and culminating in producing the product in
factory
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the factory
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. To start, the
skin
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 deliver to
factory
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the factory
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 in order to
washing
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 it, by using water and lime, next stage is soaking it in lime to remove natural fate, after that the
skin
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going
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goes
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 through
rolling
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a rolling
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 machine to
flattens
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flatten
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 the washed
skin
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,
following
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this
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 the
skin
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 is
colored
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coloured
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 by tanning the
skin
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 in mixed water and
vegetables
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vegetable
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 matter, following that the
skin
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 is
polishing
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polished
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 to make it bright
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then
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and then
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transfer
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transferred
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it
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apply
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to
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final
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the finel
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finel
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final
 stage, which is
production
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the production
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 the
skin
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 to goods
such
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 as
bag
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bags
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 and shoes.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words skin with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the seventh paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the eighth paragraph.
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