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The pictures show how the community centre looked 10 years ago and its current layout. Summarise information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparision where relevant. .

The given diagram illustrates how the design of a community
centre
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 has changed over the period of 10 years. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily clear that the community
centre
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 experienced a number of modifications, most important of which include the replacement of the
office
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.
In addition
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, there are new additions of a cafe area and bar coffee. It can be seen that a garden, which was located next to the car park in the west of the community
centre
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, was replaced by indoor sports.
Furthermore
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, the big
office
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 to the north of the plan was divided into two smaller rooms including storage and an
office
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. In the
centre
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 of the map, there was a new construction of a cafe area, which turned into the old storage.
Although
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 a car park in the west of the building still remained unchanged during the period, four separate offices, which were located in the east, were merged into a larger one today. Another
office
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 to the south of
this
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 diagram was converted into a coffee bar. Eventually, the rest of the buildings remain unchanged.

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