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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
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The bar chart compares the percentage of Australian men and women in six different
age
 groups who did regular physical exercise in the year 2010.
Overall
, females were more active in regular physical activities than males except for one
age
group
 who were
in
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15-24
age
 in 2010. As it observed the highest percentage of men doing physical activities was within the
age
group
 15 to 20 at 52.8% but
then
 it slightly decreased to 42.2% at
age
 25 to 34.
However
, the
percentages
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percentage
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 of men doing daily exercise increased to 43.1% and
then
 again
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% more for the
age
 groups 45 to 54 and 55 to 64 respectively. For
age
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the age
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group
 65 and over it increased slightly again to 46.7%.
On the other hand
,
female
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the female
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age
group
 45 to 54 did regular exercise at 53.3% which was
highest
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from
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 all other
age
group
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. The lowest percentage within the
age
group
 55 to 64 was 47.1% of
female
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females
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 doing daily physical activities.
Lastly
, figures for female was consistent through each
age
group
.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Regular exercise
  • Age demographics
  • Participation rate
  • Trend analysis
  • Gender disparity
  • Health initiatives
  • Public health policies
  • Statistical comparison
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Work commitments
  • Age-related factors
  • Preventative health
  • Exercise habits
  • Surveillance data
  • Motivators and barriers
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