Parents should encourage their children to spend less time on studying and more time on doing sports and other physical activities. Do you agree or disagree?
Many
parents
think that they should support their children
to spend time
on
doing physical activities rather than studying. I totally agree that Change preposition
apply
students
need to exercise
or sports
for Add a missing verb
do sports
their
healthy Change the word
a
life style
Correct your spelling
lifestyle
therefore
parents
have to encourage children
can spend on
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apply
time
to
Change the verb form
exercising
exercise
.
Some parents
believe that students
have to spend time
on sudying
rather than other activities. BecauseCorrect your spelling
studying
,
the Remove the comma
apply
study
is more important for their children
future which mean Change noun form
children's
high level
universities and Add a hyphen
high-level
more
better jobs Change the word
apply
so
they want their Correct word choice
apply
children
more
concentrate Fix the infinitive
to more
their
Change preposition
on their
study
than spending other sports. For example
, In korea
, most Change the capitalization
Korea
students
give up the exercise
then
Correct word choice
and then
study
very hard most time
. Therefore
, many student
feel tired Change to a plural noun
students
everyday
and be difficult to control their stress.
Replace the word
every day
However
, Many
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many
parents
think it is more important their
Change preposition
for their
children
keep
Fix the infinitive
to keep
the
balance between Correct article usage
a
study
and fitness. They understand that concentration is needed
a lot of energy so that their Wrong verb form
needs
children
make more
better Change the word
apply
score
and Fix the agreement mistake
scores
result
. Fix the agreement mistake
results
For example
, In sydney
, many Change the capitalization
Sydney
students
try to do various physical activities after school. Thus
, they know how to enjoy the
sports Correct article usage
apply
also
make more strong their physical. It helps the Correct word choice
and also
children
reduce the
stress Correct article usage
apply
then
easy to concentrate Correct word choice
and then
their
Change preposition
on their
study
. Fix the agreement mistake
studies
Therefore
, many parents
recommend and provide their children
can spend on doing
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with time to do
exercise
more than studying.
In conclusion, Studying is very important in students
's life
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lives
that is
why parents
support
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work
hardly
to make more better environment for their child, Change the word
hard
however
, I believe that keeping Capitalize word
However
balance
between health and studying is more important to make good Add an article
a balance
the balance
result
for Fix the agreement mistake
results
student's
Change noun form
students'
study
.Fix the agreement mistake
studies
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