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Traveling continues its huge growth in popularity year by year ,the most common reason is tourism.People like to vist and get a taste of a new culture and enjoy the nature. There is an ongoing debate that traveling nowadays is much easier than in the past.

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The most significant advantage of modern tourism is the digital era
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 living in.Every human being has a smartphone,
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, mobile data,mobile services and
overall
 internet.The presence of the given gadgets makes every vacation
well organised
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 and
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rapidly managed .By just surfing through the internet you can find the best destinations and book them online
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 just one click.
Furthermore
 ,you have access to absolutely all the information ,photos and reviews from other
tourists
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 perspectives . An example that acts as
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evidence
to
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 the given advantage is my recent holiday.My family didn’t want to go abroad
this
 summer because of their work,but suddenly
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 saw
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 some
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 a good opportunity so we managed to book our
well deserved
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 vacation.
This
 just demonstrates the efficiency of
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internet
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 for travelling On the
oher
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other
hand
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 there is
huge
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 disadvantage
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 is
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mass tourism.
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 to social media
the
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cultural places
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 overcrowded.
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 order to
make
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 some photos you must stay in a massive line and you
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 really enjoy the beauty of the place. In conclusion , these days it is much easier for many people to travel to different countries for tourism than in the past but
on the contrary
 there
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 particularities.
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