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Task 1: The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in the total energy supply in 4 countries from 1997 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Task 1: The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in the total energy supply in 4 countries from 1997 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart displays the proportion of renewable
energy
 in the total
energy
 supply in 4
countries
 from 1997 to 2010. There are 4
countries
 that are in different situations related to supplying renewable
energy
.
Firstly
, in
Australia
 and
Sweden
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,Sweden
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 there were below 10% from 1997 to 2010. In
Australia
, in 1997 there were less than 10%, and in
Sweden
, in 2010 there were less than 10%.
Australia
 was decreasing gradually from 1997 to 2010, but
Sweden
 has increased gradually from 1997 to 2010.
Whereas
Iceland
 and
Turkey
 were supplying massively compared to
Australia
 and
Sweden
. In
Iceland
, in 1997 there was nearly 45%, in 2000 there was precisely 60%, and in 2010 there was 70%. In
Turkey
, the highest proportion was more than 40% in 2000, in 1997 there was less than 40%, and in 2010 there was approximately 32%. In summary,
Iceland
 and
Turkey
 are the biggest
countries
 that are supplying renewable
energy
 among those 4
countries
.
Iceland
 was increasing nearly 25% from 1997 to 2010,
by contrast
,
Turkey
 was decreasing nearly 10% from 2000 to 2010. The above information describes bar data.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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