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Task 1: The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in the total energy supply in 4 countries from 1997 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Task 1: The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in the total energy supply in 4 countries from 1997 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart displays the proportion of renewable
energy
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 in the total
energy
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 supply in 4
countries
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 from 1997 to 2010. There are 4
countries
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 that are in different situations related to supplying renewable
energy
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.
Firstly
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, in
Australia
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 and
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Sweden
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,Sweden
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 there were below 10% from 1997 to 2010. In
Australia
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, in 1997 there were less than 10%, and in
Sweden
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, in 2010 there were less than 10%.
Australia
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 was decreasing gradually from 1997 to 2010, but
Sweden
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 has increased gradually from 1997 to 2010.
Whereas
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Iceland
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 and
Turkey
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 were supplying massively compared to
Australia
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 and
Sweden
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. In
Iceland
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, in 1997 there was nearly 45%, in 2000 there was precisely 60%, and in 2010 there was 70%. In
Turkey
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, the highest proportion was more than 40% in 2000, in 1997 there was less than 40%, and in 2010 there was approximately 32%. In summary,
Iceland
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 and
Turkey
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 are the biggest
countries
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 that are supplying renewable
energy
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 among those 4
countries
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.
Iceland
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 was increasing nearly 25% from 1997 to 2010,
by contrast
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,
Turkey
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 was decreasing nearly 10% from 2000 to 2010. The above information describes bar data.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, countries, australia, sweden, iceland, turkey with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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