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In many countries, women are allowed to take maternity leave during the first month after the birth of the newborn. Do you think the advantages of maternity leave outweigh the disadvantages?

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Recently the law allows pregnant
women
 to take a break after delivering,
while
 part of the society
think
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 it
worthiness
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 others do not support it. I think the benefits outweigh the drawbacks
due to
 the numerous reasons
To begin
 with, maternity break is very important after delivering , it helps the mother to recover from all the pregnancy complications and trauma. After delivering the body takes
time
 to return back to
it
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 normal state and to do so enough rest is recommended.
For
example
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 most
women
 suffer from postpartum
due to
 stress and pressure during and after pregnancy.
In addition
, transition into the motherhood can be very stressful and requires a lot of
time
 to adjust,
maternal
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 leave allows them to get enough training from those who assist them in the care of their baby
especially
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 first mums.
Furthermore
, spending more
time
 with your kids
bring
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 a special bond. As a newborn requires love and care to adjust. Research
have
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 shown that early stages
training
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 given to children can affect their life in future.
On the other hand
,
other school
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 of thought thinks that long maternity leaves can
can
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be an obstacle to them in their careers possessive.
Also
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women
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women's
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 promotion can
delays
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due to
 maternal break.
Moreover
,they might take a long
time
 to catch up with the new trends at their workplace which can
slowdown
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 business.
To sum up
, it is important for one to care for
it self
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itself
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 after delivering,I think maternity leave is
very
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essential for the healing process after delivering, even though it delays one life in career life. I suggest it
good
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 for
women
 to take enough
break
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breaks
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 after
given
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giving
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 birth
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