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The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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As an introduction, the pie charts illustrate the percentages of electricity which was produced by different sources including
renewables
, during the year 2009 in
Germany
 and in
France
.
Overall
, it can be seen that in
Germany
 the largest amount of power was generated through conventional thermal process,
whereas
 in
France
 it was by nuclear method.
In addition
, the most popular
renewables
 in
Germany
 were biomass and wind
while
 that of
France
 was hydroelectricity. In
Germany
, more than half of energy was generated through conventional thermal sources at 59.6%,
while
 nuclear parts contributed at 23% and
renewables
 produced 17.4%. In
France
, around three quarters were made from the nuclear method,
whereas
 conventional thermal and
renewables
 produced 10.3% and 13.7% respectively. Turning to
renewables
, an almost equal percentage of power is produced by biomass and wind at 39.3% and 36.9% in
Germany
. The rest was from hydroelectric and solar at 17.7% and 6.1% respectively.
Similarly
, the hydroelectric method generated more than three-quarters of the requirement at 80.5% in
France
,
while
 biomass and wind contributed in roughly similar proportions at around 10% with the least contribution from solar power.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words renewables, germany, france with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity generation
  • renewable sources
  • conventional thermal
  • nuclear power
  • hydroelectric power
  • biomass
  • wind energy
  • proportion
  • distribution
  • significant
  • contributor
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