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The chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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Information about the
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percent
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 of the Gross domestic Product of the
Uk
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UK
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 from IT and the Service Industry for five different
years
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 is presented by a bar chart.
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, the Service industry
experiences
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 very slight growth
trought
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throughout
 the whole time,
while
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 the IT
indstry's
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industry's
industry
 values double in the span of eight
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. Both industries are at their lowest in the
year
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 1992.
The
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Service
one
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 starts with
having
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four
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percent
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. of the GDP. Two
years
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 later there is a rise to 6% and
the
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 following
years
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 the growth is similar with less
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then
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 a
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percent
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 per
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 reaching its peak of 8% in the
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 2000. The IT industry starts with a bit more
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 6% shares of the market. In the
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1994
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,1994
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 the numbers go up to 8% followed by an insignificant drop of less
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 a
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percent
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 in 1996.
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 the values
skyrocket
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 to 12% in 1998 and over 14% in the
year
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 2000,
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percent, years, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • components
  • GDP
  • consumption
  • investment
  • government spending
  • net exports
  • display
  • categories
  • largest
  • increase
  • stable
  • range
  • decline
  • fluctuate
  • gradual
  • positive values
  • negative values
  • overall
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