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Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools, others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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A glance at a table graph provided reveals the number of the temperatures and hours of daylight in two cities namely
Moscow
 and
Mumbai
 in May 2007.
Overall
,
while
 the
temperature
 in
Mumbai
 was practically hotter than that of
Moscow
,
daylight
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the daylight
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 duration in
Moscow
 was longer than that of
Mumbai
. In terms of average
temperature
,
Mumbai
 was the hottest spot with
30’C
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30
 on Saturday. Meanwhile, the lowest
temperature
 remained at 29’C on the weekends.
Moreover
, the highest
temperature
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temperatures
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of
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on
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 Friday and Saturday were twice and three times as much as the lowest
one
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ones
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 respectively. The
temperature
 of
Moscow
 experienced a different image.
Although
that
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apply
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of
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apply
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Saturday was
hottest
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the hottest
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 with 10 and 9
equivalently
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respectively
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, the
temperature
 of that country was the lowest. With regard to daylight duration, the period of daytime in
Mumbai
 was 10 hours,
while
 that in
Moscow
 was 18 hours which was much longer.
While
Mumbai
 sunned at exactly 6 am and shined at around 4pm,
Moscow
 started at 5am
,
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 and ended at 10pm.
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  • co-education
  • gender segregation
  • peer pressure
  • academic performance
  • gender stereotypes
  • discrimination
  • social skills
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
  • diversity
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