The best way to reduce poverty in developing countries is by giving up to six years of free education, so that they can at least read, write and use numbers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some
people
believe that by making a free education system
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citizens in developing
countries
,especially ,
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a
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first six years of
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education,
the
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poverty
in
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them
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will
reduce
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. I
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completely
agreee
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agree
agreed
with
this
statement.
Because reading
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and writing can open many doors to
young
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the young
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generation
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this
notion proved her success in developed nations . Reading and writing are the
source
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of
any
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knowledge around the world. If
youth
in poor
countries
are educated to read and write, they will have plenty of choices in their world. As the internet has many free courses on it
so that
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, they can choose which one they learn and start to open their
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careers
in developed
countries
.
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, many
youth
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in Egypt took courses on American accents and
start
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to teach them
for
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other Egyptian
people
.
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, Kema is
Egyptian
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blogger who works
on
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America as a translator because he learned
hhimself
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himself
. So reading and writing opens
may
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many
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doors
to
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youth
to be richer than before. When opportunities open to poor citizens
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their nations will benefit from it.
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, developed
countries
applied
this
idea over
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,
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a result of ,
this
adaptation they have become rich in the 221st century
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people
are more productive and successful than African
people
who
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know until now how to read or write. African
people
still suffering to supply
them selfes by
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themselves with
food and water.
Besides
they don't have any idea about how the world has changed. In conclusion, I agree
with
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free
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education system opens doors to
reduce
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poverty
as
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when it is applied to developed
countries
their sustainability to be richer continuous , and by reading
youth
can
accur
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occur
acquire
any knowledge .
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  • poverty alleviation
  • functional literacy
  • numeracy skills
  • educational opportunity
  • employment prospects
  • critical thinking
  • empowerment
  • inequality reduction
  • sustainable development
  • innovation
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