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The chart below gives information about how many European citizens of various age groups frequently went to the gym from 1990 to 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how many European citizens of various age groups frequently went to the gym from 1990 to 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart shows the proportion of European people from different groups of ages who often visited the
gym
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 between 1990 and 2010.
Overall
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, the proportion of European people who attended a
gym
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 once a month or more increased in all
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 groups.
In addition
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, the proportion of young adults was higher than that of middle-aged ones, in which the 24-33-year-olds show the highest
gym
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 attendance.    In 1990, around 7% of the 18-24
age
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group
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 in Europe visited the
gym
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 once a month or more.
This
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 figure continued to increase almost six times throughout the period, peaking at just under 60% in around 2006.
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, the percentage of 25-to-34-year-olds increased consistently during the measured period, ranging from around 8% in 1990, and reaching 50% by 2010. Despite the highest starting figure, the 25-34
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group
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 was surpassed by the 18-24-year-olds
group
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 in 1998, remaining the second highest
group
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 over the following years.  Meanwhile, the figures for the 35-44 and 45+
age
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 groups increased slowly over the period, with both starting at just under 5% in 1990.
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 the 35-44-year-old
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group
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 rose to just under 40% in 2010, the 45+
age
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group
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 peaked at around 22%.percentage of in different
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gym, age, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 3 times.
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