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The line graph below shows the household recyclling rates in three different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the household recyclling rates in three different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 line graph shows the
rate
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 of
recycle
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 from 3 three countries which are
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UK
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the UK
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, France and Germany through
10-year-period
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a 10-year period
. In summary, we can see that there were up trends in
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UK
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the UK
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 and Germany and
fluctuation
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a fluctuation
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 trend in France. For
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UK
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the UK
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 the
rate
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 started
with
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 around 35% in 2005
then
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 rose steadily to 40% in 2009.
the
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rate
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 significantly increased 55% in 2011 and
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 with 60% in 2015. Following Germany, the
rate
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 didn't start as high as
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UK
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the UK
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 around 20% in 2005.
However
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, it constantly grew to 58% which was nearly the same as
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UK
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the UK
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 in 2015.
On the other hand
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, the
rate
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 in France was not
good
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as good
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 as the others. It started with more than 50% in 2005 and dipped down to 30% in 2013. The
rate
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 rose
up
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apply
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a bit and
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ended
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 with 40% in 2015.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • household recycling rates
  • trend analysis
  • comparison
  • significant
  • increase/decrease
  • fluctuations
  • plateau
  • progress
  • environmental implications
  • rate
  • peak
  • upward/downward trend
  • percentage
  • consistently
  • period
  • surpass
  • level off
  • stagnate
  • benchmark
  • time frame
  • sustainable practices
  • waste management
  • recycle
  • dispose
  • landfill
  • renewable resource
  • conservation
  • eco-friendly
  • green initiative
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