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some people consider price as the most important thoing to think about when buying products(such as cell phone) or services(medical treatments) do you agree or dissagree?

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 is very important and effective to buy a
product
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such
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 as a mobile phone so, most customers look for the
price
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 first. I agree with people who think that the fee is the most important thing when you buy the
product
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. I
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 believe
quality
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 is another important point to consider.
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, many things with different
quality
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 and prices are on the market today and people have many choices for buying but, some people can not afford to buy expensive products or luxury and high-brand and they have to think about
price
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.
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, the iPhone is the most cell phone these days though,
on the other hand
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, it is very expensive for some communities.
Secondly
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,
quality
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 is another important reason for individual direction in the market. It is a common belief that the
quality
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 of a
product
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 or service the higher the cost of acquiring them.
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, you can not compare two different cell phones with each other(new model iPhone with low-level phone), in terms of
quality
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 the iPhone is much better.
To sum up
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,
price
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 and
quality
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 respectively are more important in buying a
product
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 or service and I agree the
price
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 is the most important factor in consumer sending,
quality
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 after that.

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