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The charts below provide information on popular modes of transport in the city of Cambridge for the years 2008 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The charts below provide information on popular modes of transport in the city of Cambridge for the years 2008 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The pie chart illustrates four recognised methods of
transportation
;
cars
,
busses
, bicycles and walking in the city of Cambridge, UK over the period of 2008 and 2018.
Overall
,
cars
 and
busses
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buses
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 dominated the means of
transportation
 in 2008.
in contrast
 to 2018, by which all four methods are approximately of
same
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the same
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 popularity. In 2008,
Cars
 and
busses
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buses
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 formed more than 70% of the total
transportation
 share, with
cars
 forming 42% and
busses
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buses
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 constituting 30%.
walking
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Walking
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 was the least preferred method
for
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of
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transportation
, with 11%. Bicycles constituted 17% of the
overall
 four means of
transportation
.
On the other hand
, In 2018, the popularity of bicycles increased and became
the
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an
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 advantageous way
for going
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to go
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 from one place to another with
nearly
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a nearly
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 two-fold increase (30% to be specific).
busses
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Busses
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 and walking formed half of the total methods where each contributed 25%.
surprisingly
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Surprisingly
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cars
 became the least
prefered
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preferred
 with 20%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words transportation, cars, busses with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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