The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

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IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The line graph illustrates the jobless rates. the
Us
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US

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and
Japan
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between March 1943 and March 1999. The
horizental
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horizontal

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axis shows the years and the vertical axis. shows the
of
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apply

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work force
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workforce

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. I compare the
unemployment
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rate
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of the two countries percentages. On the one hand
In
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From

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1995 to 1999,
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Japan
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Japan's

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unemployment
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rate
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was fluctuating
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fluctuated

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. Between 1998 and 1999,
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the unemployement
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unemployement
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unemployment

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percentage
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and
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apply

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reach
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reached

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a peack
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peack
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peak

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at
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of

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5:57.
In
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From

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1993 to 1999
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Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

Japan
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Japan's

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jobless
rate
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percentage
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was
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gradually
in creasing
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increased

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.
On the other hand
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.
In
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From

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1993 to 1999 us jobless
rate
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was decreasing
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decreased

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. The
us unempro ployment
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US unemployment

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percentage
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began at 7% .In 1999,the figure was
deline
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decline

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.
the
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The

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percentage
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was 5.5%.
Overall
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in
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apply

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1993 to 1999.
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Use synonyms

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Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

Japan
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Japan's

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rate
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was increasing Steadily But un employment
us
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US

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jobless
percentage
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was
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apply

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gradually
falling
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fell

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over the next 6 years,
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Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

Japan
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Japan's

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unemployment
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percentage
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began at 2.51
ant us
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and the US

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unemployment
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

rate
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

began at 7% Two figures
are fluctuating
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fluctuate

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb are fluctuating. Consider changing it.

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Linking Words
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

this
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in this

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graph.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 89%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, unemployment, rate, percentage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • unemployment rates
  • graph
  • trend
  • changes
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • findings
  • observations
  • data
  • statistics
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