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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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 has posed a threat to human beings, there is a view argued by some people that it is better to coexist with it rather than take preventive measures. From my perspective, I am not in favour of
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 opinion, believing that both individuals and governments should work collaboratively to reverse the trend,
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 lowering the risks and repercussions brought by
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. On the one hand, humans are unable to make a compromise with
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, so that we can live with it in a proper manner. For one thing, there is not much leeway for us if we do not stop some human activities that are harmful to the Earth.
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, greenhouse gas emission results in global temperature rise, which makes the sea level increase to a certain degree, thereby immersing many cities and towns on the land.
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, millions of people will become homeless, and it may trigger a shortage of food supply,
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 threatening the survival of humans. For another, under no circumstance cannot we find a way to live with the phenomenon, because it puts all of us in the danger of homelessness and poverty.
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, actions should be taken to preserve the world as much as we can, in case it is too late to save us from climatic deterioration.
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 with, individuals ought to make an effort to go green, which in turn can limit our contribution to the trend.
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, we need to shift from self-driving to taking public transit, in order to consume less energy.
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, manufacturing is one of the main culprits contributing to
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, and the government needs to place higher taxes on them, in an effort to drive them to use more renewable energies and produce effectively.
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, those actions will exert a positive influence on the exacerbation of climatic
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. In conclusion, it seems to me that we must address the problems caused by
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 of coexisting with them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • prevent
  • adaptation
  • mitigation
  • cope with
  • effects
  • shift
  • mindset
  • lifestyle
  • balance
  • invest
  • research
  • technology
  • crucial
  • education
  • awareness
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