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The graph below shows the population for India and China since the year 2000 and predicts population growth until 2050.

The graph below shows the population for India and China since the year 2000 and predicts population growth until 2050.
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The graph illustrates how the
population
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 of
India
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 and
China
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 have changed since 2000 and prediction how it will change until 2050. It is apparent that the
population
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 of
India
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 has the tendency to grow from its start in 2000 until 2050 as per projections,
while
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 the
population
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 of
China
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 after reaching its peak in approximately 2030 will start to decline steadily in the future. In 2000, the
population
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 of
China
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 dominated
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India
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 with approximately 1.25 and 1.0
billion
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people
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, respectively.
However
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, as we can see from the graph, the growth rate of
India
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 is higher than
China
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 and will have
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population
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 as
China
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 with around 1.45
billion
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people
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 in 2030 and keep increasing to its peak at about 1.6
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people
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according to
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 the predictions.
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China
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, after being overtaken by
India
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 in the 2030s is going to experience a steady fall and will decline to 1.4
billion
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people
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 in 2050. In conclusion, even though from 2000 to the present day
China
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`s
population
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 is higher by approximately 200 million
people
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 than
India
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's, it is expected that in 2050,
India
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 will have more
population
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 of approximately 200 million
people
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 than
China
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on the contrary
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, india, china, billion, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 4 times.
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