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The graphs represent the different amount number of shops that freshly operate and the shops that stop operating during a country from 2011-2018

The graphs represent the different amount number of shops that freshly operate and the shops that stop operating during a country from 2011-2018
he
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The
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graph
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graphs
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 that
represent
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represents
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 closures
show
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shows
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 a significant fall from 2014-2015 with a gap
for
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of
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 more
that
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than
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 4.000,
however
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for
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apply
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the one that
represent
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represents
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 openings
show
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shows
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 a significant fall between 2011-2011 with the
differences
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difference
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 of more than 5.300. The range of total number of
shop
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shops
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 that
being
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were
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 shut down re-rise
up
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apply
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to 5.000
in
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apply
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between
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the year
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year
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years
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 2015-
2016
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and 2016
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,
while
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 the new shops re-rise
on
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in
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the year
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year
Fix the agreement mistake
years
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 2012-2014.
The
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A
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 similar amount of closure happen between 2016-2018, meanwhile the newly
open
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opened
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on
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one
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happen
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happened
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 between 2015-2017.
Furthermore
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, between the two data, there are more amount of changes
happen
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happening
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 to shops that
decides
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decide
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 to shut their shops rather than the one that decides to start it.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "represent" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "represent" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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